Re: Beta Readers
Posted: Sun Jan 04, 2009 12:17 pm
Seeking Beta-Reader(s) for: Twilight Based Fan-Fiction set months after the end of Breaking Dawn (one new main character introduced - Forks), a Twilight Based Fan-Fiction set several years after the end of Breaking Dawn (two new characters introduced - Maverick, HS setting), and an original work based on vampire lore in general.
I am looking specifically for Beta-Readers who will respect the privacy of my work until it is completed. I understand that two of the pieces are fan-fiction, but I want to share them (and my original work) when they are completed with the mass population. I do have all three of these projects being written virtually at the same time, as my writing mood does tend to shift.
As a beta-reader, you will be reading as I write. I would prefer that a beta-reader only choose one of the three that are available to be read. I have provided a small snippet from each of them below to give an idea of each to help any potential readers decide.
Please send me private messages with the format previously posted in this thread (or a link to one you've already posted somewhere) and include which you would like to beta if you're interested. - Thank you.
Fan-Fiction #1:
He looked at me, his murderous gaze now directed at me. There was a shift in his demeanor as he inhaled deeply. I felt my instincts screaming at me to run away from him. He was more than he seemed. I pushed the feelings away as he walked away from the girl towards me, but couldn’t help taking a step back.
I didn’t see him move, but I felt his teeth cut through the flesh of my neck and his cold arms around me. What was he doing? Oh, God… I knew what he was doing and what he was in that moment. Even in my fear, I could feel the coldness of his body I was held tightly against as my blood flowed slowly from me into him.
“Run…” I whimpered softly. My consciousness was starting to waver. I looked passed the monster that was draining my life at the curve of my neck to the little chocolate-eyed girl who was staring mortified. “Run… please…” I pleaded.
“Jacob!” the little girl screamed. “Someone, help her!”
Fan-Fiction #2:
In the distance two vehicles, unknown to me, pulled into the school’s parking lot. I moved down the stairs to the sidewalk and waited patiently as they got out. I felt my breath stop momentarily, a reaction I couldn’t help but quickly regained control of. They were all so beautiful. This was the Cullen family, no doubt and they certainly were going to be quite the talk of the school but my hopes of not being badgered were completely out of the question.
I waited for them to get their first impressions of the school taken in before approaching. I demanded my voice to behave as I felt it wanting to falter in my throat as I approached. They were all very aware of my presence, even though they seemed to be trying to hide it.
“Welcome to Maverick High School.” I greeted. I glanced over them, counting to make sure they were all eight were present. “It’s a pleasure to meet all of you.”
Original Work:
I often wondered if the crazed vampire that brought me into this world would have had any inkling of what I would ultimately become. Not that he lived to see it much longer than my initial awakening – he was the first person I’d ever killed, even if it was accidental. I never did learn his name, his life ended too quickly when my eyes had opened and my hunter instincts took over.
I rolled over to my other side trying to get comfortable, when I saw him staring from the shadows of my room. His body was rigid and still, obviously hoping I hadn’t actually seen him – I’d play along for now. I yawned again, stupid human involuntary actions. I could sense his movements as my human vision was slightly marred with the yawn.
I warily pushed myself up from my bed, my covers still clinging to my shoulders before falling away as my feet touched the cold floor. I could feel him moving, he wasn’t really sure of his intent now. His victim being awake and moving around must have caught him off guard. He was a fool to begin with, trying to hunt down your prey while there were others still awake and within range to hear an attack should the prey get out a scream.
I am looking specifically for Beta-Readers who will respect the privacy of my work until it is completed. I understand that two of the pieces are fan-fiction, but I want to share them (and my original work) when they are completed with the mass population. I do have all three of these projects being written virtually at the same time, as my writing mood does tend to shift.
As a beta-reader, you will be reading as I write. I would prefer that a beta-reader only choose one of the three that are available to be read. I have provided a small snippet from each of them below to give an idea of each to help any potential readers decide.
Please send me private messages with the format previously posted in this thread (or a link to one you've already posted somewhere) and include which you would like to beta if you're interested. - Thank you.
Fan-Fiction #1:
He looked at me, his murderous gaze now directed at me. There was a shift in his demeanor as he inhaled deeply. I felt my instincts screaming at me to run away from him. He was more than he seemed. I pushed the feelings away as he walked away from the girl towards me, but couldn’t help taking a step back.
I didn’t see him move, but I felt his teeth cut through the flesh of my neck and his cold arms around me. What was he doing? Oh, God… I knew what he was doing and what he was in that moment. Even in my fear, I could feel the coldness of his body I was held tightly against as my blood flowed slowly from me into him.
“Run…” I whimpered softly. My consciousness was starting to waver. I looked passed the monster that was draining my life at the curve of my neck to the little chocolate-eyed girl who was staring mortified. “Run… please…” I pleaded.
“Jacob!” the little girl screamed. “Someone, help her!”
Fan-Fiction #2:
In the distance two vehicles, unknown to me, pulled into the school’s parking lot. I moved down the stairs to the sidewalk and waited patiently as they got out. I felt my breath stop momentarily, a reaction I couldn’t help but quickly regained control of. They were all so beautiful. This was the Cullen family, no doubt and they certainly were going to be quite the talk of the school but my hopes of not being badgered were completely out of the question.
I waited for them to get their first impressions of the school taken in before approaching. I demanded my voice to behave as I felt it wanting to falter in my throat as I approached. They were all very aware of my presence, even though they seemed to be trying to hide it.
“Welcome to Maverick High School.” I greeted. I glanced over them, counting to make sure they were all eight were present. “It’s a pleasure to meet all of you.”
Original Work:
I often wondered if the crazed vampire that brought me into this world would have had any inkling of what I would ultimately become. Not that he lived to see it much longer than my initial awakening – he was the first person I’d ever killed, even if it was accidental. I never did learn his name, his life ended too quickly when my eyes had opened and my hunter instincts took over.
I rolled over to my other side trying to get comfortable, when I saw him staring from the shadows of my room. His body was rigid and still, obviously hoping I hadn’t actually seen him – I’d play along for now. I yawned again, stupid human involuntary actions. I could sense his movements as my human vision was slightly marred with the yawn.
I warily pushed myself up from my bed, my covers still clinging to my shoulders before falling away as my feet touched the cold floor. I could feel him moving, he wasn’t really sure of his intent now. His victim being awake and moving around must have caught him off guard. He was a fool to begin with, trying to hunt down your prey while there were others still awake and within range to hear an attack should the prey get out a scream.